Board Thread:Archives/@comment-24149269-20150113021040/@comment-25401609-20150113102459

Okay, a few problems. One, too young for prison and locked up? Nope. Make it all in first person (uses I) or third person (he), not some unholy abomination of the two. "becomes mr. hero," isn't a very good description as it is quite vague. Please elaborate. Finally, we need an alignment.