Board Thread:Citizenship Applications/@comment-26149503-20160505002206/@comment-3542404-20160505011508

I'm not entirely sure where to begin on what's wrong here, so I'll try to break it down.
 * 1) The application's rife with spelling and grammatical mistakes.
 * 2) You seem to be confused about the character's name in the first place: Katashi or Aerio, pick one and be consistent
 * 3) Surnames are not used by "common" families and was typically only seen in richer families with more status, this application doesn't come accross as such at all
 * 4) The history is full of holes, and you didn't mention what country this takes place in
 * 5) Benders cannot use poison weapons
 * 6) Benders are not as natually skilled with weapons compared to nonbenders
 * 7) You put "Personality" under looks, it should have its own section, and be FAR longer
 * 8) There is no mention of when your character first showed the ability to bend
 * 9) A 10-year-old wouldn't stand a chance against a Shirshu, especially given its paralytic venom
 * 10) You can't have a Sabertooth Moose Lion as a pet, it's too big an animal.
 * 11) You didn't mention the character alignment