Board Thread:Citizenship Applications/@comment-28295254-20150730183057/@comment-5142966-20150730195851

hmm okay, nothing too bad for your first app. but there are some issues.

I'd like more explanation on his relationship with his parents before he turned 10. Before turning 10, he should've realized he was a nonbender. I mean why did the father just go on a killing spree? maybe I can get some explanation on that.

the entire concept of him wanting to be a swordsman and wanting to train himself to be better than his father who was also a swordsman doesn't make too much sense. and you didn't really go into detail on how a 10 year old fended for himself. maybe he got taken in by an old swordsman dude. last note: when people threw rocks at him he could've just fought back, pretty sure that bleeding through the skull thing is perm brain damage.

sorry didn't mean to make it so long bro.