Board Thread:Citizenship Applications/@comment-31604582-20170721184357/@comment-3542404-20170723231048

Personality is still flat, you've basically described two facets of her, but barely shown what drives her, or what she likes/dislikes, hobbies etc.

To borrow RWBYfanon: "Though one of the easiest to think through, personality is one of the hardest sections to get right. The main focus here is to truly establish the character you have in mind. Often the first thing one would go over would be the character's natural mindset. How do the normally act? Talk? View the people and world around them? Be sure to delve deep into the character and ask as many questions as possible. Why does the character like what they like? Why do they hate things?"