Board Thread:Citizenship Applications/@comment-1295345-20141205230339/@comment-1295345-20141207194322

TheOrbitingStars wrote:

Anonymius wrote:

TheOrbitingStars wrote: The personality is a little too short. You also either need an image for your character or describe whathe looks like. How did he practice proper firebending if he lived around all water benders or non benders? Doesn't make sense and plus, he couldn't become that powerful. Why would he travel across the world? Expand on his journey to  Republic City. What does he plan to do to be this beacon of light? I thought I rather summarised his personality rather nicely in four words, what else do you need to know (plus I think I mention a bit more about his personality in the second paragraph)? Also i thought I gave a good bit of his appearance ("pale skin, bright eyes and golden hair"). Also is it so unfeasible that he is so naturally gifted that he could teach himself? And didn't I mention that he was exiled from his village? What else was he supposed to do after that happened?

As for how he plans to be a beacon of light, Guang hopes that he can be so well known and have such a high status that he can be an influence in the city We are trained to tell you the things that are to be adjusted in your application. So I must ask you to fix these things. Most of the things list are required. The personality must be at least a paragraph long and the description must be a section under your personality - another paragraph. Go ahead and fix the things I suggested and we will get you approved in no time.

Thanks. Okay, I've now made the amendments you requested (although to be fair the citizenship application form never stated how long the personality section had to be). Also I'm a bit confused when you said that the description is under the personality when the same form had the description above personality (as I noticed it is with one of the existing characters)